World history suggests that violence and conflict were more evident under male leaderships than under female leaderships. So, for peace to prevail, female leadership can be considered as better option than male leadership. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is strongly argued, historically, that with

men

in power, the

world

faced more armed conflicts and violent ones than under

women

leadership.

Thus

, to conquer a peaceful life, females are taken as the best

leaders

compared to

men

. In

this

essay, I will discuss my somewhat agreement towards

this

topic.

From History books and testimonials, it is a fact that wars and catastrophic events happened under male commands

,

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because rarely had a nation

one woman

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as their leader.

Therefore

, I agree that under male command, the

world

had more violent incidents.

Additionally

, in the past, feminine leadership were not

incentive

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neither a highly discussed topic, because

women

barely had their rights

alike

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to

men

and only in the late twentieth century, they conquered similar positions.

Then

, it is negligent to

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less violent incidents due to more

women

in

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lead. What is possible to affirm is that, recently, after

Second

World

War the

world

became more diplomatic aligned with

more

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open-minded and respectful society.

After years of malevolence amongst human beings, they become more peaceful, because they accepted differences amongst themselves and

therefore

, they evolved.

Besides

that, they

also

have accepted that

women

could strongly contribute

for

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a better

world

. Indeed, it is possible to outline strong

women

who could peacefully avoid conflicts

such

as Margaret Thatcher, known as

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women

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who lead the UK for fifteen years, faced powerfully

the

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Socialism and battled their influence over the British.

Thus

, nations

leaders

regardless

their

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genre have recently praised by peace, and undoubtedly, strong female

leaders

contributed to that once they were in power.

However

,

this

does not make them better

leaders

or more prepared than previous

men

. Certainly, a man would have done the same as Thatcher,

for instance

.

In conclusion, I somewhat agree

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the prompt, because several nations had meaningless

men

leadership who sought blood conflicts

during

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centuries.

Nonetheless

, at that time, any country had

women

as a leader,

then

, impossible to relate that with

women

the

world

is more peaceful. In recent decades, it is possible to value female

leaders

who strongly defended their country with no battle conflict,

however

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I believe that

men

would have done alike

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