we live in a world of technology these days. While the Internet brings it with clear advantages, the problems in terms of control and security of information outweighs the advantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the contemporary

world

, technology is in the spotlight and could allow the

Internet

to bring undeniably numerous benefits to

people

.

Nonetheless

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some issues regarding the control and safeness of

information

outweighs

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the positive development. In my opinion, I totally disagree, and

this

essay will discuss some arguments that support my view.

To begin

with, the

Internet

is a milestone in the

world

the main reason why I believe

that is

because it has changed completely the way

people

live today. The virtual

world

brought about a faster pace into everyone_s life when some matters became simpler than they used to be,

such

as how

people

communicate, search for a job and even how they acquire knowledge.

Under

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my perspective, the lack of security

which

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some websites may have, or even the absence of the source of the

information

do not minimise

people

_s usage.

Another reason why positiveness outweighs the disadvantages is

because

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the free content available online has enormously increased. Several

people

share

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they

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knowledge through online platforms which make

information

runs faster amongst

people

. Once they become more frequent and common, cybersecurity needed to grow at the same level to assure that the environment is safe, and the

information

shared is accurate.

Consequently

, with the advent of

this

rapid growth, the way a country regulates its permits and prohibitions needed to evolve and indeed it does not mean that all problems diminish the importance of all advantages presented.

In conclusion, it is clear that problems regarding cybersecurity

exists

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, because they have evolved alongside

with

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the

Internet

,

however

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it does not make them more evident than all pros the

Internet

brought to the

world

such

as the rapid knowledge shared and the faster way of life.

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