We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in businesses, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used for in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we he more auspicious of their benefits?

Nowadays, we hardly can be separated from technologies. I believe that technologies development would continue to the point that human_s involvement

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some kind of works become minimal. Almost all of our activities require

machineries

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such

as

computer

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or

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mobile-phone

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. With the help of

such

machines, things turn to be easier.

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essay will highlight both the benefit and

drawback

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of

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of

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technologies,

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computers.

To begin

with, the main benefit of

compurization

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communication

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is that some works become easier,

hence

, reducing worker_s

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work load

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.

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from

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computer

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, they could save numerous

datas

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and could always be accessed instantly.

This

is a great achievement compared to bookkeeping or other manual

archieving

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that are tedious and require a

lot

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manpowers

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However

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such

convenience is that

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are no longer needed for certain works,

thus

, the high number of downsizing turnover.

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,

self check-in

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machines in the airport are a common thing in recent days.

Therefore

, employees who work in check-in boots are reduced.

This

kind of development gives advantages to the airport management as they

pays

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less for employees_ salary, but become

a sad regretful news

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for the employees who lost their job.

Additionally

, computerization is vulnerable to be hacked that sometimes, the classified data could be accessed by an outsider.

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essentials for

this

kind of job.

To conclude, computers make life convenient in many ways, so it is apparent that they would continue to become part of our life. After

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analysis of

this

subject, I recommend people to embrace

this

technological development while

simultanously

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upgrading our self so that our values as

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being are not lost.

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