It is true that nowadays there are dramatic changes
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virtual entertainment
. , but some
believe that
phenomenon can bring several negative impacts on individuals and
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society. I personally believe that there is no evidence to justify
view.
and obviously,
it may be beneficial, entertainment on
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can bring about several negative impacts. Video games are additive so many young
these days spend too much
on their
and
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isolate themselves from others.
lack of face-to-face interaction not only hurts many
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relationships but
increase
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of mental health issues among young
.
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when
waste large amounts of
on virtual
, they tend to be less physically active, which can in the end lead to problems with eyesight,
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and posture.
, lack of
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over a long period of
makes
vulnerable to metabolic diseases
as obesity, which cause
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deterioration of health.
,
there
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available many
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of
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in
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,
suffer from
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of stress,
spend a lot of
in front of virtual
and it is harmful from different sides.
, spend
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amount of
in front of virtual games, we lose our precious
it profound on our
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and memory.
In conclusion, society already used to gadgets, handheld
which harmful as explained previously.
the accessibility of entertainment on portable
can result in many health risks, they can
be effective stress relievers for numerous
, and encourage the networking of like-minded individuals across the globe
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