Some people think zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed. However, some people think zoos are useful to protect the rare animals. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

People have different views about whether

zoos

should be closed due to cruelty or remain to save endangered species. While I believe that

zoos

have advantages to rare

animals

, and I would like to discuss both

of

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views as below.

On the one hand, some people highlighted those wild

animals

are born to live free, and it is unnatural and intrinsically cruel to keep them in captivity in

zoos

.

As a result

, extensive ranges of

animals

are suffering from mental illness in

zoos

.

A research

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conducted by a

animals

rights group of more than 80

zoos

nationwide suggested that those

animals

that kept in captivity in

zoos

which

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are 100 times smaller than the minimum home range in their natural habitat are more likely to suffer from abnormal and self-destructive behaviours –

for example

, pacing, walking in

tight

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circle than those who can rove freely in their natural habitats.

On the other hand

,

zoos

have provided safe habitats, well-trained zookeepers, and a nurturing environment for taking care of those endangered species that struggling in the wild for many years.

Furthermore

, those creatures can be encouraged to reproduce with professional medical care in a safe

surrounding

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. A good example would be

panda

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the panda

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, an adorable creature

who

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is

the

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significant animal in China that almost people from worldwide love. In my opinion,

this

case could prove that

zoos

are working to protect

the

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rare

animals

from extinction.

In conclusion, I do agree that

zoos

_ management needs to be improved in terms of

animals

_ welfare, while I still believe that

zoos

are necessary for wild

animals

.

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