Some people think that money is the best gift teenagers.others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

10 April 2022 IELTS IN EASY STEPS Writing 0

👁 12

The

two line

Add a hyphen
two-line

It appears that two line is missing a hyphen. Consider adding the hyphen(s).

show examples

graphs illustrate how the three electrical equipment of

ownership

changed in a particular country and how many

hours

one

household

spent on doing house chores on a weekly basis from 1920 to 2019. Generally, the

ownership

for washing

machine

Fix the agreement mistake
machines

It seems that machine may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

show examples

,

refrigerator

Fix the agreement mistake
refrigerators

It seems that refrigerator may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

show examples

and

vacuum

cleaner

Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners

It seems that cleaner may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

show examples

experienced

a

Remove the article
apply

The indefinite article, a, may be redundant when used with the uncountable noun growth in your sentence. Consider removing it.

show examples

significant growth with fridge and

vacuum

cleaner

Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners

It seems that cleaner may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

show examples

becoming the most ubiquitous items whereas a downward trend can be observed

on

Change preposition
in

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

show examples

the amount of time that a single

household

spent during that period.

In 1920, when a

household

consumed 50

hours

a week, the proportion of washing

machine_s

Change noun form
machine

It seems that this noun form may be incorrect.

show examples

ownership

was significantly the highest among other appliances at 40%.

However

Add a comma
,However

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase However. Consider adding a comma.

show examples

in 2019, washing

machine

Fix the agreement mistake
machines

It seems that machine may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

show examples

became the least popular type

although

it

Correct pronoun usage
they

It seems that there is a pronoun problem here.

show examples

reached over 70%. In the meantime, the number of

hours

a single

household

consumed declined dramatically to 10

hours

a week in 2019.

Meanwhile

Add a comma
,Meanwhile

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase Meanwhile. Consider adding a comma.

show examples

there was a noticeable increase in the

ownership

of

vacuum

cleaner

Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners

It seems that cleaner may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

show examples

from 30% in 1920 to 100% in 2019.

Similarly

, the proportion of

fridge_s

Change noun form
fridge

It seems that this noun form may be incorrect.

show examples

ownership

was a mere 30% in 1920, followed by a considerable increase to 90% in 1980,

then

it reached a peak of 100% in 2019.

To sum up, almost every

household

possessed a fridge and

vacuum

cleaner, spending less time on them in 2019.

Be the first to comment

Leave a Reply

Your email address will not be published.


*