Some people think that in order to produce a happy society, it is necessary to ensure that there is only a small difference between the earnings of the richest and poorest. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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rgue that the community could be harmonious and happier if the financial dissimilarities between the affluent and the well-on people are wider gradually. In my own_s perspective, I wholeheartedly disagree with

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notion, due to the lack of keen competition and motto of life of individuals in

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ubjective side, it is undeniable that harsh conditions and fierce competitions are inner motive to encourage the development of

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and industry. The fact that without the competitiveness human are frequently lack of personal efforts. To exemplify,

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of improving or enhancing their self-worth by gathering more academic knowledge or broaden their knowledge to increase their

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value and working performance, low-income people in some developed countries are

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on monthly financial public welfare, they regularly enjoy

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edentary lifestyle and costly recreational, like

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amble,

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ore heavy burden on social welfares and national budgets.

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prosperity dwellers should be received financial support to some reasonable extent.

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aspect, the positive attitude of economically weaker people poses a good motivation

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life together with high spirit. Obviously,

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trend creates an equal

society

and assist people to overcome all difficulties and even misleading direction.

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riminal record are often have a chance to rehabilitate in jail. If they can take advantage of training job and skillfully, they completely have a good chance to earn a good living career as blue-collar workers after being released from jail. Thereby, broaden the horizon and conveyancing inspiration to aid economically unfortunate people are

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and measure in companion with the harsh competition of modern

society

as far as positive images, who try too hard to pass over the poor financial situation in need to propaganda widely to gain the public concerned.

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