Some people say that the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?

It is argued that a sufficient amount of

money

is a way to have a happy

life

.

On the other hand

, there are lots of examples that other

values

are existing.

This

essay will discuss both questions and

then

give my opinion.

Nowadays making

money

is one of the highest priorities of our society.

Firstly

,

unlimited

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bank account gives

an

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access to the most available

values

and

life

benefits,

such

as

luxurious

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cars and spacious villas in the most exclusive destinations. It opens doors

of

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all boutiques and prestigious shopping malls, as well as empowers people to hold a special status to be rich. Unfortunately,

to earn

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a lot is a well-recognized and highly demanding trend in our daily lives. All media

community

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, including movies, newspapers and online social sources are programming everyone to be

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of

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to

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money

.

In

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contrary

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, there are other

life

values

are available. It is

obviously

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, that many things are priceless. You cannot buy a true friendship, you cannot buy love, in

the

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most

cases

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you cannot buy

a

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good health. Is anyone see

a

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happiness in the shop? Probably not. Occasionally

on

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some

stage

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you may have access to more valued items, but

at

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the

end

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money

would not play the most important role. Luckily, more and more people are recognizing it, and already adjusted their attitude to it.

In conclusion, I would like to say that being extremely rich is still a target of

the

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most people in our community.

Nevertheless

, it seems to be less popular in the nearest future. Our generation becomes more sensitive to

the

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life

balanced

values

,

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and targeting more inspirational and rational resources of happiness.

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