Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Recently,

health

problem particularly caused by live style is the most important issue which

need

Change the verb form
needs

The plural verb need does not appear to agree with the singular subject the most important issue. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

show examples

to

resolve

Wrong verb form
resolved

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb resolve. Consider changing it.

show examples

. Some

people

believe that the most effective way to improve

citizen

health

is by developing sports

facilities

massively, while others say that

these programme

Change the determiner
this programme
these programmes

It appears that the plural demonstrative these is modifying the singular noun programme. Consider using a singular demonstrative or a plural noun instead.

show examples

provide little impact and need another alternative. In my opinion,

this

measurement has

non-significant

Correct article usage
a non-significant

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

show examples

Replace the word
effect

The word affect may be used incorrectly. Review the following notes to determine the appropriate usage for your context.

show examples

affect

Correct your spelling
effect

The word affect doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

show examples

to

Change preposition
on

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

show examples

public

health

in

wide

Add an article
a wide

The noun phrase wide range seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

show examples

range of

area

Fix the agreement mistake
areas

It seems that area may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

show examples

;

however

,

this

essay will explore both

aspect

Change to a plural noun
aspects

The singular countable noun aspect follows the quantifier both, which requires a plural noun. Consider using a plural noun or a different quantifier.

show examples

of

discussion

Add an article
the discussion

The noun phrase discussion seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

show examples

.

First

and foremost, increasing the number of sports

facilities

such

as jogging track, mainstream field, and other specific

arena

Change the wording
arenas

The adjective other appears to be modifying the singular noun arena. Consider making a change.

show examples

are

Change the verb form
is

The verb are does not seem to agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

show examples

beneficial to enhance public

health

in Indonesia. By providing

this

venue,

Add an article
a citizen
the citizen

The noun phrase citizen seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

show examples

citizen

Fix the agreement mistake
citizens

It seems that citizen may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

show examples

will

able

Add a missing verb
be able

It seems that you are missing a verb. Consider adding it.

show examples

to express their interest in any sort of

exercise

freely without limitation.

Therefore

, the development of public

health

is extremely beneficial.

However

,

this

facility concentrates in the city centre; it rarely develops in

the

Correct article usage
apply

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

show examples

remote area, so

that

Correct word choice
apply

It seems that conjunction use may be incorrect here.

show examples

the government should formulate

the

Correct article usage
apply

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

show examples

other effective solutions.

The essential programmes that must be conducted by the authority are not only from

facilities

but

also

encourage individual spirit as well as provide

health

checker to give an alert of warning.

Instead

of doing

exercise

in

public

Add an article
a public

The noun phrase public facility seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

show examples

facility

Fix the agreement mistake
facilities

It seems that facility may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

show examples

, it is more effective and efficient if

people

conduct their

workout

Fix the agreement mistake
workouts

It seems that workout may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

show examples

at home. They can utilize any

kinds

Fix the agreement mistake
kind

It seems that kinds may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

show examples

of house equipment

such

as stones,

woods

Fix the agreement mistake
wood

It seems that woods may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

show examples

, or even sand to create

the

Correct article usage
apply

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

show examples

exercise

tools.

Moreover

, in order to anticipate the late measurement

such

as

Add the preposition
foras

It appears that there is a missing preposition after the word as. Consider adding a preposition.

show examples

overweight and over, the government should actively provide

initial

Correct article usage
an initial

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

show examples

health

checker that can easily find by

Add an article
a citizen
the citizen

The noun phrase citizen seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

show examples

citizen

Fix the agreement mistake
citizens

It seems that citizen may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

show examples

, so that they can understand their

health

level before it

getting

Wrong verb form
gets

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb getting. Consider changing it.

show examples

worse.

In conclusion, providing several sports

facilities

are beneficial for only a part of

citizen

Add an article
a citizen
the citizen

The noun phrase citizen seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

show examples

who

Add a missing verb
are close

It seems that you are missing a verb. Consider adding it.

show examples

close

Change the verb form
closes

The plural verb close does not appear to agree with the singular subject citizen. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

show examples

to the venue, while

people

in

remote

Add an article
a remote

The noun phrase remote area seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

show examples

area are difficult to reach them. I would advise the ministry of

health

of the Republic of Indonesia to focus on educating

people

for

Change preposition
about

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

show examples

daily

exercise

at home and providing

health

checker

Fix the agreement mistake
checkers

It seems that checker may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

show examples

as a preventive action.

Be the first to comment

Leave a Reply

Your email address will not be published.


*