Some people prefer to directly help or support people who need it in the local community, however, others prefer to give money to national or international charities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There are different views among individuals in offering help to the needy. Some individuals choose to support

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the local group, whereas

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opt an international or

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charities by donating.

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essay will analyse both perspectives and I personally in favour of the latter view.

To commence with, on the flip side those who provide money to help people in need through charitable trust give their reason as follow. It is irrefutable that the authenticity of

such

actions will be questioned when the assistance is offered from charities,

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is primarily because being a donator there is

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to the information of the receiver. Adding to it, the purpose

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fundraising may not be legit as there is no accessibility to analyse the situation.

For instance

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a survey conducted in Syria, in 2019 by an NGO revealed a

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truth as only 62% of the funds that

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received were distributed and utilized for the people_s welfare during the crisis.

On the bright side, there are many reasons why some individuals prefer to perform

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activity to those in the local community.

Firstly

, serving badly off among local society will provide an opportunity to see them in person, which allows

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the support if required.

Secondly

, it is evident that the help would reach on-time as it is within a limited circle, which

also

gives access to get to know about the actualities.

Lastly

,

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involving highly in voluntary activities, will contribute

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identifying the individual who

require

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assistance and it could be given

then

and there without any

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delay. To illustrate, in a group

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community where everyone knows each other well-being the purpose of requesting

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help cannot be manipulated.

To conclude, I would like to reiterate that helping directly to those who entail assistance should be highly appreciated without any middleman involved, while it reaches

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people

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a timely manner and genuine remain will remain unchanged.

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