Scientific research today attempts to go too far. There are certain things in the world which we simply should not try to understand. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Hereby I express my deep interest in applying for the Master of Engineering in “

Energy

and Environmental Management in Developing Countries” at Europa-Universität Flensburg

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since I wish to continue my academic path in

such

a renowned University and specialize my expertise in the

energy

field, the area where I started my professional career.

I am Industrial Engineer

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at

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Universidade de Fortaleza in 2016 and I have

also

concluded a Master of Business Administration in Project Management in 2019, which has pleasantly surprised me with wide lessons and good practices that can be applied to any area. During my professional journey, I have always pursued to achieve higher levels and stand out in the competitive job market. In order to enrich my curriculum, I count on several courses and certifications,

such

as Black Belt Lean Six Sigma, 6 Sigma for Design and APQP4Wind.

My

first

contact with the

energy

sector was in 2015

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when I started to work at Aeris

Energy

as an intern and worked my way until the engineer position. Aeris is a wind blade manufacturer with more than 5000 employees and has produced thousands of blades worldwide for important players in

wind

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market,

such

as Vestas, Siemens Gamesa, Nordex, GE and Acciciona. At Aeris, I have played many roles, the main ones where Change Management Leader and Product Engineer. In both positions, I was the client person-of-contact to receive customer_s requirements and to ensure they would be met, by analyzing the impacts and planning the implementation along with other teams.

The

energy

field is a recent industry and amazes me been

part

of the history where we are creating our own standard and procedures as we grow. Brazil is a country with great potential to stand out within

this

area,

however

, we still struggle with the lack of professionals to do knowledge transfer with the younger ones. For

this

reason, I would be delighted to be able to contribute somehow with that developing curve.

I cherish to have international experiences and learn new. I have lived in Germany for 1 and a half

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as a scholarship holder from the Brazilian Government and DAAD in 2014 and I was

part

of

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School program in

USA

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in 2008.

Consequently

, I speak Portuguese and English fluently, and Intermediate level of German and Spanish. Those experiences abroad enlightened me to respect and admire the world_s differences and cultures.

Regarding my personal skills, I consider myself self-motivated, adaptable and a goal-oriented person. I am

also

known for my organization and courteous

behavior

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. I look after principles as honesty and ethic to guide life in all aspects.

I believe that being

part

of the Master of Engineering in SESAM program would be life-changing to my professional and academic career. I would be

honored

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to be

part

of it, and from me, you can expect a participant fully engaged and committed to the results and success.

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