Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life. Which do you consider to be the major influence?

Many scientific works have shown that innate features have a higher effect on our individuality and growth when compared to any life experiences. I believe that inborn abilities play major roles in the formation of

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character.

Many argue that the characteristics we are born with have more influence on our personality. The principal reason for

this

is that the mind and behaviour of an individual

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hardwired to a part of the brain called, _the limbic system_. It controls all aspects that make us human and

therefore

it is very difficult to alter

this

core process. A good example is a student who is

left handed

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, there is no amount of practice that will make him comfortable doing chores or school work with his right hand because these actions originate from the brain. It is

therefore

clear that

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innate abilities are more influential on the

person

we become.

On the other hand

, some say that our life experiences have a higher impact on our persona. They argue that if we go through obstacles in life,

then

we might be changed by situations that we have faced.

For instance

, a very temperamental

person

could become less volatile, if circumstances show to be unfavourable to their temperament.

However

, I would suggest that it could be impossible for people to change and there is probably no form of experience that could affect a

person

_s behaviour even when they try.

In conclusion, there is

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clear evidence that shows that inborn

ablity

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ability

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,

such

as; left dexterity plays a major role in the

indentity

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of a

person

.

Nevertheless

, we must try to change any detrimental attribute we may possess, even though it is probably impossible to do so.

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