Nowadays people are trying to have a successful career and happy family life at the same time. What problems could this create? How can people overcome them? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your personal knowledge or experience.

It is undeniable that a lot of people today want to build an excellent

career

and to have a strong family at the same time.

However

, in

this

sutiation

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they could have a fiasco.

This

essay will discuss a possible solution of how to find a balance between family and work.

First

of all, it is essential to identify a problem. The majority of people who are trying to have a

career

and a good family at the same time

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as a result

don_t have anything at all, or at least just one thing from

this

list. And we have a lot of examples of it. Take some celebrities

such

as Eminem or James Cameron

for instance

. Both of them have

an

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exsiting

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careers.

However

, as we know it is impossible to argue that their family life is happy.

Moreover

, other artists who chose a family have

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uch less successful

career

.

There is only one solution

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this

issue. If someone in the family wants to build a

career

the other should understand

this

, stay at home and take care of their children. In

this

case, it will create a perfect opportunity to have a good balance between a

career

and a family. I have a few friends with

such

experience and I definitely can say that they have

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in their job and

a truly good families

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a truly good family
truly good families

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.

In conclusion, it

it

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is a huge problem in the western world for people to choose between work and family.

However

, it should not

to

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be forgotten that it is possible to solve

this

problem and to not have any issues with it at all

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