Many people use distance learning to study at home ,but some people think it cannot bring the benefit of attending collage or university. Do you agree or disagree?

Whether condemning longer in prison is the only best way to decrease

crime

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the crime

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rate

has been a popular topic recently. In

this

essay, the opinions on both sides will be discussed followed by my own take.

It is manifest that condemn longer can increase the

crime

cost of

criminals

, which might indirectly reduce the

crime

rate

in society.

For example

, at the beginning of the foundation of new China, the government announced a series of strict rules and

laws

so as to embody the incorruptible part of the party. The

crime

rate

was very low partly because potential

criminals

feared the

laws

. In light of

this

fact, it is undeniable that releasing more strict

laws

with long prison sentences would be efficacious in abating

crime

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the crime

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rate

.

Despite the sound effect of the above method,

nevertheless

, it might not be the optimal one as the potential

criminals

still exist. When more and more potential

criminals

have in society but do not reveal

under

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the public, the potential hazard will increase, and the instability will rise correspondingly. One of the suitable examples is

the

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apply

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ancient China governed by emperors, having

unstable

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an unstable

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society with strict

laws

.

A plausible way to tackle

this

issue, from my perspective, is to improve the

wellbeing

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well-being

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of citizens. Ensuring the fundamental necessities of every individual by

government

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the government

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may be practical and effective.

This

is basically because many of the

criminals

break

laws

to just satisfy their basic needs of lives.

To conclude, I cannot deny that condemning longer is not an effective method to reduce

crime

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the crime

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rate

, but improving the wellbeing of citizens might be more reliable and more thorough.

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